Black Poetry : 6 Carat Diamond Ring, Platinum Band, Baguette setting

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  1. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you gave me that ring;
    and i told you it would mean everything
    that my past is now over and done
    that we have to begin a newer one
    leave precious petty childhood fights
    and sharing every sleepless night
    standing up whenever you do
    seeing the universe as just us two.

    you gave me that ring.

    i put it on:
    and all the insecurity is gone
    you know where i want to be
    every vision i could've perceived
    when the refridgerator was bare
    when we toss diamonds in the air
    when your shoes had dirty laces
    times we couldn't stand each other's faces.

    that ring is mine.

    i wore that **** ring:
    scrubbin dishes in your sink
    washin your dirty socks and draws
    holdin hands in the mall
    when other men tried to come through
    when i was pissy boilin steamin mad at you
    when you came home flossin two kids
    when you were facing two life bids
    testifying lying for you in court
    sippin mai-tai's at a jamaican resort
    scratching bloody red up and down your spine
    staring at it long lonely nights convincing myself you ARE mine
    holding you close the night you almost died
    caressing your frame the nights you cried.

    I WORE THAT **** RING!!!
    rearranged my life and everything
    and you can stand here with a straight face
    and tell me i no longer have a place?
    you dont want me anymore? that ring was for ever
    this life has done everything to mold us together!
    whatever you think she will give you, you already had-
    but if you don't take my ring off her finger-
    and i DO mean NOW-
    i'm goin deep in both yalls ***!!!
    copywrite2003alw --MsDy
     
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    blackwizdom Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am sure there are plenty women out there that can relate ...nice poem my sista
     
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    Legacy21 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gotdamn this was hard! I felt the rage and righteous indignation in this piece! Poetic Justice at it's realest! Feeling the flow forreal!
     
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    Oh my Dynasty,

    This is banana's. This has crazy energy. I could feel the flow of anger and everything. You started off nice and easy. Everything cool. Then the tension builds until you finally snap. Brilliant.

    I'm sorry, but I couldn't help laughing at the end. I know your heart was broken dear. I'm sure he doesn't know he lost a good thing.
     
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    That ring is yours,and if he don't give it back lets team up together and whip his ***. He's a fool.
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He gave her the same ring he gave you?????????
    naw I must have misread
    lovely flow poet
     
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    like the flow...very nice poem...
     
  8. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you to all who were feelin me on this one. life is only a tragedy if you never learned to laugh- im glad it was enjoyed.
    GOD bless- Ms.Dy
    P.S. Y'all know I got that ring back, right!!! :)
     
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    That's right! lol
     
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    Feelin it girl! I've never experienced anything close to that, but you made me feel your anger and betrayl. Great Job
     
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