Black Poetry : 5 minutes before Death 1st draft.....

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  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wanna meet myself
    5 minutes before death
    asking me questions
    of what the future holds

    I'd right the wrongs
    I have committed
    before they even happen
    Just imagen

    Knowing what your journey is
    where you are going
    what you have done
    your accomplishments

    But knowing me
    I'd ask myself
    who won the last 5 world series
    so I could bet on them

    I'd ask myself
    who was the woman in my life
    that I should hold on to
    so I can make her my wife

    Who should I stay away from
    cause we all know
    that haters are out there
    just waitin

    But what I really
    would want to know is
    was my life happy
    worth living

    full of enjoyment
    was there dispare
    hurt
    pain

    Does my seed
    precieve me as a good man
    was I there for her
    Being daddy is important to me

    but those are just a few things
    I would ask if
    I could meet myself
    5 minutes before death
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one that rivers in my mind
    to meet myself before death arrive
    this joint was tyte can't wait to see the 2nd draft
     
  3. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh the pitfalls we could manage to side step...umph. Loved the concept and how it was posed poet.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love how the son put it down on this one. Holla at me!
     
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    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you two so much...
     
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