Black Poetry : 5 little letters

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by renee31127, Dec 29, 2003.

  1. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I want to tell you
    Tell you how much I want you
    How much I want to be with you
    But I can’t
    It’s like the words just wont come out
    Like I’m in middle school again
    I want my best friend to tell you
    I wanna trip you in the hallway, so you’ll notice me
    Or maybe pass you a note
    “Do you like me?
    Check YES or NO”
    (if NO, than I didn’t like you anyway)
    My palms are clammy
    My hands are shaking
    Thank goodness I’m not standing
    Cause I know my knees would buckle
    Under all this pressure
    Of just one little word
    That I just can’t seem to say
    You’re making me crazy
    And you don’t even know it
    Cause you’re standing right beside me
    And my lips a stuck together like glue
    I want to tell you that I love it when you smile
    That I melt whenever I hear your voice
    That the way you smell intoxicates me
    And that I find it hard to look at you lips
    Without wanting them all over me
    I’m fighting the urge to do very bad things to you
    But I say absolutely NOTHING
    Like I don’t even see you standing there
    I’m right here if you want me
    But how will you ever know
    If I can’t even utter a simple
    hello
     
  2. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ;) I know exactly how you feel! I can definitely relate! Much love to you.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved the way you posed this...that word, makes us so vulnerable.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice drop....
    i likes this..Angel
     
  5. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    guessing the five letters the whole time, loved the way it flowed down the page in anticipation. been there.
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    o'yes i check
    felt all dis here scribe
    let it continue
     
  7. renee31127

    renee31127 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    true love- I'm glad I'm not the only one, I felt like such an idiot after this happened, lol.

    watzinaname - thank you and that is so true, it's just a word but it's sometimes hard to say.

    mzblkangel- :heart: :heart: :heart:

    Randee- I really appreciate that, I wasnt thinking all that when I was writing it so I'm glad you could see it :)

    $$RICH$$ - :thanks: :)
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl this was so real...
    it's amazing how raw emotion
    can make you feel as a child...
    as if you're spinning...as if you're mute...
    haven't we all been here...
    I'm relating girl...Flow on Sister!
     
  9. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    ah yeah...
    word...
    back in da day
    when i was supa shy...
    those 5 letters
    were a giant barrier too...
    i felt this joint here...good scribe
    one love
    khasm
     
  10. shUt-Yo-M0uf

    shUt-Yo-M0uf Active Member MEMBER

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    ohhhh ive been there...verii nice
     
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