Black Poetry : ...458 days later.

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  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    he told her… in the sexiest…
    most convincing voice
    she’d ever wanted to hear—
    you can leave right now…
    & come when you get here

    the play on words was
    extra-cute &…
    she knew that if she left
    she was going to do (him)…
    just like the last time
    when she
    followed her first mind
    & went to see about him…
    only to arrive (multiple times)
    at the center of this thing
    called divine &
    she couldn’t deny that the
    entire ride was overflowing
    with delicious-ness &
    accentuated by countless
    moans & endless sighs
    …so many in fact that even
    458 days after the initial act—
    she can still recall the exact
    moment that… their bodies
    made complete intimate contact...
    she can still remember the
    feel of his hands on her back…
    her lips still recollect the
    sweet taste of his deepest kiss…
    her nipples still reflect on
    his tongue’s soft caress &
    her thighs still reminisce about
    his warm mouth prints…
    …& all of this 458 days later.



    © SunShyneOrygynals 2002, all rights reserved
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awww Sookie Sookie Now!!!!

    Elayne,

    This is :flame:ing :hot: ****!!! Very clever thought pattern and
    play on words mos' def!!!!

    Promise I won't have ya waiting fo hunnit and some odd days again!!! :laugh:

    For real though - this joint is sexy and steamy like that!!!

    I dig it very deeply!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    woooooweeeee!!! dis here was so tyght and hot as hell
    u go gurl write dem words
     
  4. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok.....HOL' UP JUST A MINUTE!!!!!! ok......ok.....ok

    spring is a cummin a tad earl-laaaay y'all ... and er uh, I ain't mad :D

    loveded this....woooweee!

    a
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    whoa
    it was all of that huh?

    nice piece GA_
    like the metaphors

    dssNY
     
  6. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AlwaysThanks.


    Sherrie. don't tell mama!! (i'll help mr johnson for you
    for a month!! :lol: ) thanks for the read sister dear!! :heart:

    Soja. uh huh! it was alla dat! (LOL) thanks for the read
    darlin'!! :heart:

    Alyce. you are too funny!! springs cummin"?? it's all
    good sis... i KNOW you meant comin'! :D thanks for the read!

    $$RICH$$. i'm glad you enjoyed ya self!! you put a
    smile on my face... as always!! :heart:

    GeeQue. HA! you betta recognize that i cain't be
    waitin' on your *** that long in the future!! :lol: thanks
    for bein' first to peep this one! :kiss:
     
  7. Danilyn

    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oooo Sunshyne!! U nasty!!! But I love it.
    I'm so jealous!
    "only to arrive (multiple times) at the center of his thing called divine"

    Just ****!!!!!
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA,

    This is tyte!
    Scribe On Poetess!

    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    Uhhh mmmmm watch ya self....... Getting a little Xtreme....and I like that...........
     
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    Gosh darn it Sunny E...

    he put it on ya, didn't he? Daaaaaaaannnnnngggg. I'm jealous.

    Huuuuuuuuuh (me sighing). If it wasn't me... I'm glad it was you.

    :lol: Hot like fi'e sis... hot like fi'e!!!!! :hot:
     
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