Black Poetry : 360 degreez (what goez around...)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by theDynasty1979, May 17, 2004.

  1. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i was there ridin the benches
    while you was scroungin in trenches
    diggin up dirty ones for fun
    proclaiming them the chosen one
    clean up woman so i was for so long
    stayed down and dirty while you did me so wrong
    i squeezed tears out these pretty blues
    an instrument you used
    discarded moved on walked away
    still waited for you to come back one day

    till i changed i grew i learned to love myself
    and not give away all my faith to someone else
    i found a good man a good life and much peace
    and here you come again trying to give me your grief
    listen chief: i'm sorry that you're goin through so much
    and i know i could take the pain away with one touch
    but you chose her; you gave her pieces you never showed me
    you chose to love her; now accept what came to be
    we started off as lovers; we don't know how to be friends
    treated me like the waterboy; so forgive, but i dont understand
    what is it that you're expecting? i can't symapthize right now
    all i can do is gloat, because you see it all now
    how any and everything that you ever do
    will some how and some way come back to get you
    all the pain all the lies all the sleepless nights
    none of this would have happened if you'd treated me right.

    so when you come to me with hopeless expressions
    and usher-type confessions
    i still feel the connection; but i'm keeping some space
    i hate to see the treachery of her etched on your face
    but what am i to do? hold you? comfort you? clean up her mistake?
    baby boy baby boy... it's entirely too late.
    moonlight flooding his face as he knocks desperately on my door
    i loved you once... but i just can't do it anymore.

    --peacebeme MsDy
    (copywrite pending/all rights reserved to aisiah l williams)

    (good luck in your life...
    if you ever find some one
    to love you half as much as me
    i hope youre smart enough to make her
    your wife.)
     
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    well felt flow here it speaks out clear
     
  3. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well its kind of late as im writing this... i just got out of bed to answer the door and it was him... so there may have been some rambling... but yall gotta forgive a sistah... sometimes poetry is a lot like therapy- you start unleashing and no telling what all you dig up.
    peacebeme--MsDy :D
     
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    Beautiful...is only a fraction of how I feel about this poem. It make me feel so sad at the end...but as we all know, ..what goes around...comes around...faster!! ...he had his run...and now he's done.
    I like where you took this.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i felt this
    nice write
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    TD79,
    i really enjoyed your flow and the payback not coming at the hand of the one once misused but from fate being recognized and the strength not to jump on the roller coaster again for another ride......refreshing write.
    mos' people don't learn or they like to ride the roller coaster so much that they hop right back on over and over and over even tho they keep gitting pulled viciously along the tracks......up and down, around and around....

    Peace and Blessings...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What goes around comes around, and sometimes with much more force that second time, you brought us right into this scene with your words.
     
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