Black Poetry : 3 year old poem

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Doryea, May 14, 2007.

  1. Doryea

    Doryea Member MEMBER

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    Anyway was going through some old stuff when iwa s still in high school and I came across a few o my old poems... I honestly wish i can have back the feeling i did wit my writin iw as honestly stunned the way and how emotional I used to write but anyway ya'll be the judge


    Baby I'm so confused..... i dont even know wat to do
    Everyone all on me... I cant breathe
    What am I meant to be?....

    Everyday i wake up livin in the same rountine
    why can i just break the ritual and make the green
    Yet i still do the same things that everyone wants me do
    but deep on the inside i feel like a fool,
    To me it looks like everyones already laid the steps I'm meant to take
    But....
    why cant i just step to the side and break the tape...
    everyday feel like um a hostage in my own **** mind, litterally going insane
    I'm gone numb.... I can't even feel the pain no more
    Things have just gone way past the sky,
    I'm walkin the tight rope, livin the line
    Thinkng..... about what shud be mine..
    I stand up and grasp for it but i cant reach it.....
    I just noticed my arms have been cut short

    Love and lust some people think it the same thing
    Why?... I don't know...
    is this what they call life?....
    I'm full of mistakes....Sigh
    Why?... I don't know...
    is this what they call life?....
    Losing the people that really care, pushing them away making them hate me
    Why god? Is the devil still trappin me again?
    Tell me what is my inevitable plan to overcome the odds of the spirits deadliest man.
    His got that strong chokehold
    Is my heart strong enough to break.......it....
    You know I wished that life had moved on...
    I still have them guesome thoughts in my head
    They at the edge and ready to spread.... like..
    A viral infection hidden deep within my blood stream
    Some people think life's all about happiness and bliss
    Not every kid goes home to a mother to kiss
    Why?... I don't know...
    is this what they call life?....
    I used to think to myself... "only in the land of the free"
    Then i realized you can't live through a storm without the left behind debris
    Sometimes i wish i could just be the Grim Reaper and bring back the dead that's inside me
    But tell me......
    What really is destiny?....
    Is it the steps that you already taken...
    Or the steps about to be?
    I ponder.....still tryna figure out my lifelong question...
    Why is it that i'm the missing puzzle piece in the wrong box???


    Baby I'm so confused I dont even know wat to do
    Everyone all on me.... Baby I can't breathe
    What am I meant to be?.....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    you are that you are and what u are to be
    this was awesome smooth and a treat
    took me right here..

    Everyday i wake up livin in the same rountine
    why can i just break the ritual and make the green
    Yet i still do the same things that everyone wants me do
    but deep on the inside i feel like a fool,
    To me it looks like everyones already laid the steps I'm meant to take.



    This right here grab me...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You wrote from that place where your emotions resided at that time. It's not always easy to choose the right words to express yourself when you're emotional, but I feel that you did a fine job with word choice. I think many can relate to your words.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Doryea:
    3 years is not that long ago.
    I bet you still got the flo.
    The is a really deep scribe, and
    I enjoyed the read.:)
     
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