Black Poetry : " ..29 fences "

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...narrow your friends to one hand and life'll be grand...

    a bulletin says
    "Exit 30- welcome to the promised land"
    and i had to jump 29 fences of projection
    toward truth and consequences
    to finally being a descent conscience man..
    it was all in my mama's plan
    and as sure as the heavens and earth were given me from her hand...
    may my God rest her soul...
    just as sure as she show me wisdom her 3rd son would soon understand
    and that's why
    the closer i get to the Sun
    the further my love is for my orange moon
    and two stars
    by which my world spins
    while our blind youth prefer ends,new cars,
    desperate wives and convenient girlfriends which spurs their end...
    ( i been there i sinned there
    my wheels spinned there but God delivered me a pen there
    )
    but if anything these things
    define you(th) for the worse
    driving your future in a hearse
    somewhat steered by political, social and mediocre pallbearers
    but is the homes' lack of solidarity that gives outside leverages
    that eventually buries our black youth in the dirt....
    and the truth... it hurts
    it flirts in the sheets of faith and reality
    when all l want is a bigger salary and a clear mentality
    and by the 35th fence retire
    and show those after me how to jump the barb wire...

    p.s
    the older i get the sexier i am.....
    consider this "outtake" an integral piece of the poem
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A definitive statement made here...

    Sir, your art, along with it's point is well taken.
     
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    j'hi

    this is a good write, brother. expressing your practical and attainable goals and setting a written guideline and example. push poetry like this and squash (most of) the rap game!

    from Sha'iyn alsoknownas Shuga Shane
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Experience is one heck of a teacher, it's there we learn that what our mamas tried to tell us was true. An btw, I'm sure that your maturity becomes you, poet. Always good to read you.
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yea

    poet if you can jump the "35 fence" and retire

    then god bless you

    love the growth of a man

    into a.....................

    man


    peace

    poet

    1,000
     
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    standing on da D this was well posed