Black Poetry : ..........

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Sep 26, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Of myself I’m so ashamed,
    I didn’t even bother,
    To give this piece a name…
    I had that talk,
    But it didn’t go the way,
    I had planned.
    Apparently someone felt as if,
    I needed a hand,
    Expressing my feelings.
    They didn’t give me a chance.
    They ran ahead and told you,
    In a nutshell,
    But you could still tell,
    Everything that I had planned to say.
    In fact,
    You came and asked me about it.
    You caught me off guard,
    You made it extra hard,
    For me to come out with it.
    So I held back…
    So right now,
    I would like to apologize,
    To my heart,
    For making you go through this,
    Being torn apart,
    Again…
    For shutting the door,
    On your release.
    Again…
    And for opening,
    The windows to my soul,
    For the liquid words to flow,
    When I’m in the comfort,

    Of my solitude.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    be as whom one be release and let it free
    this was mad tyte and well felt ya craft takes me under everytime
    flow on, speak to me !!!
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a tight drop
    release and flow on....
     
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    You've got a lot of talent, young lady.
     
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    this is a great flow i like how you incorporated the concept behind not having a name to your piece into a flow. but sometimes we need a jump start to releasing are feelings. you situation is not neccessarily a bad thing, i am not trying to tell you how to feel. just giving you another perpective of things.
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To each response.....you made it a little bit easier for me to deal wit it....knowing that my time of distress allowed me to birth this scribe and it was felt. In developing my gift, I learned from the best. :wink: Thank you... :thanks: Thanks phenomenal woman for your shed of light on a seemingly dark situation...even tho I still feel as if :insane:.......My eyes have been shifted to the brighter side.
     
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    I have to give props to the way you conceived this piece. The experience was unsettling, so you posed this as though the writing of the poem caught you unaware, so unaware that you "couldn't" even fathom a title. It often takes a lot of thought to construct something that seems to be casually put together. Great flow.
     
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    tru dat keep ya eyes on da sparrow chastity
     
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    wow sister at some and point in our lives we all feel it
    :grouphug: may you find peace through this piece :)