Black Poetry : 24 HOUR MARATHON

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Therious, Jun 24, 2004.

  1. Therious

    Therious Banned MEMBER

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    WHAT DID U DO WHEN U WOKE UP TODAY?
    DID U HAVE TO FORCE YOUR SELF TO MOVE FROM THE PLACE THAT U LAY,
    IS IT WATER ON THE BRAIN,
    IS IT HEAD AND STOMACH PAINS,
    IS IT JUST SOME MORE S*#t TO MAKE U CALL IN AGAIN,
    DO YOU WORK FOR YO LOOT,
    DOES YOUR LOOT WORK FOR U?
    HAVE YOU FORGOT THOSE BILLS IS COMING TO CHECK DAT *** 2,

    DID U LOOK BEFORE U LEAP,
    DO U PREY BFORE U SLEEP?
    DO U DREAM WHILE UR AWAKE,
    IS THERE DEATH OR IS THERE LIFE UP ON YOUR DINNER PLATE?
    DO UR NERVES SHAKE LIKE EARHQUAKE,
    IS IT OPEN FOR DEBATE,
    ARE THEY ALL UP IN YO FACE,
    IS THIS RIGHT TIME BUT ITS JUST WRONG DAY,
    DO U HATE THAT f@#$ING SONG BUT YOU STILL LET IT PLAY?

    IS IT AN ACT OF KINNESS, OR A MISTAKE OF BLINDNESS?
    DID THE CLOCK RING YET
    IT WILL BE SOON DO U WANNA BET
    ARE U DREADING THAT SOUND, BUT U MUST PUSH ON
    ON YA MARKS GET SET 24 HOUR MARATHON

    THERIOUS
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sounds like ya venting a release
    feeling you on this
    are we so blind and on the move
    that we just don't hear or see or care
    strong flow, can see many edges to this
    flow on...keep the flow rolling
    Peace~N~Love
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    expressing and venting
    tyte heads up for da morning rush
     
  4. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece was very nice, and funny and serious. I really enjoyed reading this...while your pen is on a roll...keep floating.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Time to make those donuts again...yea, it's a rat race out there, I liked your flow on this.
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    release it
    nice one
    peace
    Angel
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I read this...
    I felt all the exhaustion,
    anxiety and frustration I feel
    every morning before
    minutes before the alarm
    goes off...*whew*

    you did an excellent job
    of pulling your reader into
    the movement and feeling
    of your flow...

    Great Job! :toast:
     
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