Black Poetry : 22, a world away

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gempis, Nov 7, 2004.

  1. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    there's something about her eyes
    the way they look into mine
    I can tell we both see life
    through the same brand of window
    those eyes sometimes travel my way
    for telltale seconds
    speaking a universal language
    that can't get past her throat
    we have so much in common
    there could be a world of understanding
    if it was
    that kind of thing
    she's the model I would order up
    if I had such a checklist
    tough on the outer, soft gold inside
    athletic, kind and smart
    I think about what it would be like
    to make love to her all night long
    kiss her softly and hold her
    spoil her like I love to do
    play together and have fun
    teach each other and talk
    I know she's
    thought about it too
    but she's 15 years younger than me
    and this isn't middle age
    where it wouldn't make a difference
    here the years
    stand tall like trees
    blocking the way
    I think I'm cursed
    right girl, wrong time
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was sweet...but ya know sometimes age aint nothing but a number
    full of emotions and i enjoyed your scribe.....thanks for sharing a part of you with us....
    Peace
    Angel
     
  3. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was anouther one of those poems that i would
    just like to keep on file, for the simple fact that i
    experienced this scenario first hand this past summer
    with my first boyfriend, he was 22, which made
    him 7 years my senior. But i loved how this just
    brought back some the memories of him,
    that I just knew i had forgotten.
    But over all, this is a very touching piece.
    And it has a wonderful flow.
    "KEEP EM COMIN"...1

    :welldone:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautiful sight through them eyez
    of glaze the number become less
    i can relate and feel ya sis.
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    twas nice gempis...but i don't understand...
    a world away in intellect...
    a world away in morality?
    22 isn't l5 you know...
     
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    Where worlds collide... a heart survives.

    Loved the scribe!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    <deep sigh> You gempis, this one seems like your whole heart is weaved within. It appears to be heaven sent, yet one roblem gets in the way. But, I'm inclined to agree with deepy, she's 22, not 15. If the two of you take it slow, and as things progress, you both still dig each other, who will it hurt? Just a suggestion, this was an emotive piece, beautifully written.
     
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    yo...i've been there with the time issues before
    but the reality of the situation is that
    TIME TELLS NO LIES....
    tyte joint sis...
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mzblkangel, thanks for taking that part and embracing it. :heart:

    MzMelanie2u2, I appreciate the love and the encouragment, baby! Thankya.

    $$RICH$$, that is such a beautiful reply. Thank you for understanding, sweetie. :heart:

    deepy, I think she has some growin up to do - wild oats to sow and things to settle in her mind. Thanks for stoppin by, sis.

    1poetsought, thank you my brothah. Love ya.

    well, watz, I will continue to have an open heart but have no expectations at the same time. Thanks for the love on this, sister. :heart:

    Khasm, warms my heart to see you stop by my scribe. Thanks baby, and one love.
     
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    ...oh...how long that I have awaited
    for the Queen...of depth to emerge
    and speak...

    and finally...that day as arrived
    and she..."Gempis" has shown her
    light...of words upon me again :wink:

    Girl...that age thing is such a pain
    but time is man made / when the divinity
    of a true connection is made...
    Love conquers all things
    it's been done before...

    Love this flow...Loved the last stanza
    That metaphor was soooooo rich and
    soul clenched with emotion...

    Consider me ~ Captivated~
    Much love...
    Your kindred spirit
     
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