Black Poetry : 2 women

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Mar 30, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I
    A vuitron bag
    leather heeled boots
    appointment/date book in silver jeweled hand
    a long trench coat
    "marcelled" hair...loosely oiled
    as though water was the base
    shaded eyes
    all in place
    as magazine says you should
    a city look of darken browns and black
    a city look
    to keep you back

    II
    She walks with lots of energy
    bent over
    her face little seen
    her sound
    high pitched note of knowing
    a cackling laugh
    making me smile
    walking behind seven spirited energies..
    and keeping up
    a long skirt - blue
    a cane to hold
    years beyond my comprehenson
    alive
    inside








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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    womanly touch indeed
    this was sweet Deepy
    lovin it
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flowing
    likes
    Peace
    Angel
     
  4. watzinaname

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    Great visuals in this, keep this flow going.
     
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    I've done this before, looked at two individuals' differences. You laid it down really beautifully, deepy. Simple yet deep.
     
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    The eyes of two through the poetic voice of ONE :)
     
  7. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    And these two opposing realities meet only in the eye of the poet who makes sense from a bird's eye view of what the groundlings cannot see.
     
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    nice flow
    wonderful drop
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  9. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i appreciate the support .. ladies and gent
    yawl, you all, you
    continually help in my
    continuance..
    watzinaname..i have several more parts to these ladies...i will work on it
    river...like the waters you are deep....and able to see...beautiful
    triniti..as carson mcculler says "they are the we of me"
    bluewater and mzblkangel...your consistency in reading me is so appreciated
    gempis..."the simplicity makes for the complexity" as mymother use to say
    $rich .. i wouldn't be here without you...thank you for such a generous heart
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm really lovin' this...
     
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