Black Poetry : 1st post ever(wanna be poet) please let me know what u think

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticwords, May 29, 2003.

  1. poeticwords

    poeticwords Member MEMBER

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    Im just a wanna be poet
    trying to get better
    I know im not that good
    but...
    I seem to be drawn to poetry
    Like lent to a dark sweater
    I find myself in word spells
    as if my brain has an unspoken story to tell
    some people say I have talent
    well, hell... I can't tell
    I've been trying to write a poem worth reading for years
    but all i can come up with... are lame poems about tears
    maybe I have to go through the darkness to get to the light
    but from where I stand in the dark
    theres no sign of brigtness in sight
    maybe yall,my peers can bring me insight
     
  2. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you got skills,
    i can see it in your words.
    don't listen to those haterz,
    they flow in cow herds.
    i started off like you,
    talking 'bout break ups and tears.
    but i kept on trying,
    and i got better--so i'm now here.
    i got over 700 poems,
    but if i have no understanding they are of dust.
    keep on scribin',
    destee and the crew will help u,
    that's enough.....................(i don't know what they talkin' 'bout u got some SERIOUS skills-just let a little more out-don't hide what u keep inside u feel me?)
     
  3. Lahana Mysteria

    Lahana Mysteria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poems written through tears and personal feeling are the best kind because they come from within....that is always worth something.
    Write on....
     
  4. Khasm13

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    you gotz skills
    believe in thine self
    and let the ink spill
    until
    you have nothing left to say
    every poet writes in his/her own way...
    peace
    khasm
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    The emotional feel u pose
    make u a poet in whole
    ya wordz of flow show it
    poetically sprayed ........
    just let ya feelings go
    flow on mental things u know
    drop lines on the life u pose
    scribe in vibes of what u heard
    dis be da poetic word
     
  6. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree with lil cherry
    You have a lotta skills
    There's no such thing as "fine-tuning" poetry
    What you write is what your heart wills
    So who cares what those dummies think?
    You have been blessed with this gift
    A gift to move potential mountains
    Words that will make soulds lift
    Embrace it..........
    Welcome to Destees!
     
  7. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Babe i must say you got flow
    Fo sho you came real
    Always take out the time
    To say what you feel
    Because if you go unspoken
    Who knows -- the whole world might chilled
    Someone might get killed
    Or there'll be the greatest oil spill
    In the world, i know you're like
    What the hell she talkin bout
    Those reasons really 'bite'
    They just might
    But your fate sweetheart lies in your hands
    Always take time to list your wants and demands
    The ones you hold dear and the ones you call fans.
    By the way babe, REALLY FEELIN YA FLOW MANN!!! :heart:

    Actin a lil silly on this thang...holla back @ cha gurl tho!
     
  8. Royal_T

    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i thought this was raw mr. keep 'em coming
     
  9. NADIA*BINTA

    NADIA*BINTA Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "...but from where I stand in the dark
    theres no sign of brigtness in sight..."

    yo, i see brightness in your piece... pray you recognize it too... and keep on flowin like you need to... feelin that.... looking forward to readin much more...

    peace
     
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    I think you got skillz!
    I think you only need decide
    where you want to be poetically
    and then be there!
    Peace!
     
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