Black Poetry : ?????

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MORE, Sep 17, 2003.

  1. MORE

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    i sat there on the couch
    and begin to tell u good-bye
    i kept my composure
    but was crumblin on the inside

    my sentences flowed
    like a politicians review
    i had practiced the speech
    that i'd give to you.

    we just had ate fish
    and watched tv
    i went over my notes mentally
    as i gazed at the screen.

    i won't cry i won't back down
    no matter what
    i will not clown
    i won't cry i won't back down

    no more sex is how it begin
    i wanna be your lady
    not just a friend
    with my legs crossed, i was silent, again.

    i love you yes, and dig u so
    but if you won't comply
    i must let you go
    fingers thumpin on couch in even tempo

    u twist and turn
    with no eye contact
    must mean my words
    have some impact.

    its late and we should be
    making love
    but u can't be a man
    and give the others up.

    dressed in black
    my words came clear
    nothing like something u wanted to hear
    good-bye.
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

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    like the read...nice flow goin on..
     
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    i liked this MORE,
    much love to ya, :heart:
    -story
     
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    this is deep
    powerful vibes my sistah
    much love to you
    Peace
     
  5. MORE

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    glad yall dig it.,thanks!:toast: :toast: :toast:
     
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    MORE..
    Nice poem.. I like it.

    I don't see enough of your post. I like your style. He should have taken the other route. I would rather keep someone as a friend. Some of the times and things you can do together flow smoother if there are no ties. I could dance with my friend, hug my friend, kiss my friend on the face. I could hold my friend and tell my friend how much I am displaced. I would rather have my friend in my life than live without her voice. This is a conscious decision I'll make but I would chose that choice.
     
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    :eeek: More...*clearing my throught* as I read this the words came alive and all other sound ceased to exist...just WOW :) what an idiot to let a sista like my gurl MORE just pass him by...
     
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    I agree with Triniti, you don't need him gyrl! This was a great poem. MORE! MORE!
     
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    hodee, u know i love your flo, thank you, yes this was and still is hard, i have tried to call, him and tell him, i think i made a mistake, but now he is angry, im unsure why? he throws what i said to him, in my face, i wish i had said nothin.:eek:
     
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    thanks sister, yes, i believe he wants me around, but i want more, he says to take time, but i already have, so i dunno, :crying: :crying: thank you!!!!