Black Poetry : 15 May

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  1. waynethomas

    waynethomas Active Member MEMBER

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    Pictionary experts,
    Our conversations held
    Involved
    Words or imagery enough to keep
    Both our minds truly engaged.

    They lasted for endless hours,
    Sometimes
    Days drifted passed,
    But
    Needed substance was drawn from each others
    Vibe,
    Which was enough to feed sleep
    And the need for the digestion of food.

    The depth if our knowledge shared
    During our
    Countless shared evenings,
    Would make the mountains volumes,
    As no human vessel could contain all its chapters.

    The request
    For each others visions was,
    At this point in time,
    Not needed,
    As
    Communication
    Alone was used to
    Cure curiosity
    And painted warm day dreams,
    Which were held
    All
    Night
    Long
    Until the suns circle brought him back
    To gradually
    Wipe dry the frost from my window.

    Connections built on the
    Experiences of life's travels,
    Mirrors on goals for each to reach,
    All laid parallel on our unique differences
    Which then made us closer than inseparable.

    By this time
    Bodies now ached for a
    Solid image to place on retainers,
    To
    Process in the mind that this one –
    That ill hope to see in time –
    Will be beautiful for my eyes and me.

    So we made a blind meeting to
    Fulfil our anxious desires,
    And build on a
    Beauty which has been built on the base of –
    As should all relationships –
    The warmth of personality…

    So
    That was the story
    Until now
    And now I'm finally here,
    An impatient body on this elderly arm chair
    Time slowly ticks closer.
    Frustratingly,
    Time nonchalantly moves near…

    I smile,
    As I have noticed and seen her symbolic red rose
    Which was a mark to be worn
    And held in her hair.

    As I look at the sight…
    Calf and thighs are tight!
    Clothes and styles is just right,
    And her smile was like…

    How can I explain this…

    I just don't understand as
    Her teeth
    Were throwing down shapes like gangs signs at me man!

    So
    Swift with movement,
    I removed my signature blue tie and
    Directed back my eyes to see if
    She had seen this last action from me.

    She didn't.
    And sat there patiently…
    Waiting for her to leave…

    The
    15 may
    Was the day my conversation left her
    But the thought of me never seemed to have left she.
    And every year,
    I'm talking religiously,
    She sits there with
    Her smile
    On a
    Impatient body
    Now sat on that same elderly arm chair,
    With her fresh red rose on show
    Waiting for my figure –
    Tall to the sky with a blue tie –
    And each of those years
    I fail to appear.

    I hope she'll be ok soon
     
  2. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    wow

    this is BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN... x 1,000,000

    wow wow wow.......
     
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    Hi waynethomas
    Mmm
    Yes I enjoyed reading this flow
    And my reason is because
    It gave me a deeper meaning
    of what it means to share the time
    with another. In deep communication.
    It ended sadly, but with some hope to
    Keep the flow coming

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    I think what impressed me the most with this, is the structure of this piece...the pace...drew the reader into the closeness between the two, and then the distance. Well written flow.
     
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    awesome u took me in and back out here