Black Poetry : 13 things...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Sep 27, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So many wasted lines,
    That came together,
    That collaborated and created,
    My ‘love life’…on paper

    Wasted electronic and cursive ink,
    On just stating how I felt,
    Like how I thought you were the missing link,
    Not to complete me,
    But to be the one,
    Who knew how to treat me,
    Sweetly, not ‘discreetly’,
    Or ‘secretly’,
    But it would have been obvious,
    To the naked eye.

    So many wasted dreams,
    Fantasies, with you and me,
    That alone put me in ecstasy.
    Just waiting on the manifestation,
    Outer demonstration,
    Of all the wonderful things we could do.

    Wasted investigations,
    Into your confusing indications,
    Leaving me with implications,
    That we shared an attraction.

    So many wasted accessories and cosmetics,
    Name brand, store bought pheromones,
    That were to act as a magnetic force.
    So many wasted advising conversations,
    As to what next course of action,
    Should be taken,
    Not knowing that in your eyes,
    Compatibility had long forsaken this union.
    Wasted time…
    Waiting for a never-ending,
    More than just befriending season,
    Where we engaged in intimate communion.

    Wasted smiles,
    The special ones,
    The ones brought about by,
    Pictures of you looking deep,
    Within my eyes, with meaning,
    Then forcing them to close from the touch of your lips.
    Then I wake up and realize that I was only dreaming…



    Wasted attempts to impress you with knowledge,
    Seeing that it’s rare for you to find an 18 year old,
    That already graduated from college.
    I may not be as polished,
    But I’m definitely on my way.
    But still all that’s left to say is…
    I wasted my love,
    My heart,
    My mind,
    And my time,
    On you…
     
  2. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well----------one things for sure and that is that you didn't waste your time writing this out. these were words brought most def to the page. and sistah if it means anything------------------you didn't waste your time, not to me, you just were learning a lesson of time..........now you can use it more wisely........this line caught me right here:



    "Not knowing that in your eyes,
    Compatibility had long forsaken this union."

    that was :dj:


    time is something ain't it?????????? :wave:
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You may feel you wasted your time, but if there was a lesson to be learned, and you did indeed learn something, then in some ways, it was time well spent. Feeling this vibe.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love this vibe..you flowed this str8 tight!!!!!
    within every season its reasons of growth
    lovely write...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    truely u didn't waste ya time nor a single line
    it's heard and felt safely kept u came out on dis one
     
  6. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all......now that I think about it.......i did learn something..something that I can carry with me as I continue on the road that HOPEFULLY ends with true love. :car:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the path u take is the path of love where true love awaits at the end
    keep moving in high spirit as u learn the depth of love
     
  8. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey thanks for the assurance RICH and others :spin:
     
  9. mysslez

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    ****......this was put together in its truest form.....the time you took to write this piece was definitely worth the experience.......keep shining...keep writing....



    LEZ
    At my purest
     
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