Black Poetry : 1001

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  1. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    1001 dreams of you
    1001 days since you’ve gone
    1001 other girls you’ve had
    since we
    didn’t even say good-bye
    1001 tears i had to cry
    1001 letters with 1001 words
    i sent to you
    waiting in vain for a response
    1001 kisses i still taste on my lips
    your lips
    1001 times you caressed my soul
    1001 minutes
    and you made me feel like a queen
    you – my king
    the greatest being ever born to this earth
    the most appreciated life
    1001 months we sat in silence
    hostility reigned
    anger kept creeping
    from underneath the bed
    penetrating our minds and spirits
    grabbed us as anger –
    that was his name – he said
    turned out he was a liar,
    his name was hatred
    with 1001 times
    managing to have this once so strong
    love completely dead.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one thousand and one times like 1001 before
    and it will be 1001 more ahead ...but da completed
    love not dead .....the true love coming tyte write !!!
     
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    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...anger creeping from under the bed...

    Excellent line poet!! the intesity in this poem is subtle, yet strong. Almost as if you felt this way and accepted that it's time to move on.

    NittyGritt
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like how your brought this....
    but all is never lost...
    nice flow enjoyed the read

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Poet...this was an awesome peace
    written with a whirling ink of emotion
    been here, got the t-shirt and the mug...
    this poem was entrenched with a pain
    that only comes from lost love...

    flame on poet...
    Nice work!
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes feels like it goes on and on forever, those countless disappointments in love...Your piece conveyed this feeling very well. Thank goodness, there's a brighter day coming. Keep flowing.
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it happens that way sometimes sista. you captured the emotion of loved lost very well. something i think we all can relate too
     
  8. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hearts2: I feel you wrote this one for me...as if you opened up to one of the countless pages of my diary, and wrote a poem about the kinds of love i've had. this was an awsome and heartfelt piece..."Keep Em Comin"...1 :hearts2: :welldone: :hearts2:
     
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    most welcome very nice piece of art work
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is so sad but so right on. Beautiful piece.