Poetry Critiques : 100% PROOF OF TRUTH

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  1. dymondtanae

    dymondtanae Member MEMBER

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    Am I imposing on your mental?

    By composing this spiritual,

    sentimental presentation of my

    reputation of intoxication

    Taking you on a soul vacation

    That will set you free

    Get intimate with my words

    Coaxing your mind into taking

    A journey into my world

    Let me bring out the emotions

    You try to hide by multiplying

    Them by infinity and injecting

    Them eternally

    I know you’re scared of me

    Your hesitations has manifested

    Into procrastination because my

    Presence makes you think too deeply

    Are you a Painaholic, Deathaholic

    Loveaholic, Hateaholic

    Wordaholic or a Poemaholic

    Cause I provide a mixture of all logics

    I am 100% proof of truth

    I maybe smooth to the taste

    But if you know like I know

    You’ll just sip me

    Don’t try to be hard and down me

    Cause this true **** will go straight to your head-PROFOUNDLY



    (Continued)

    Cause I speak about

    Pain that will burn your chest

    Death that will water your eyes

    Love that will make you stumble off your feet

    Hate that will turn your stomach, See

    My words will get you buzzed, but my

    Poems will get you ****** up

    You couldn’t even get to the next cup

    My 100% proof of truth will

    Make your world spin and

    Make you pass out and

    You will be devastated by

    The phrases I hand out

    Society will delude you into

    Going to truth anonymous

    They’ll swear what I say is preposterous

    Cause they’re trying to detoxify you of knowledge

    But it’s your decision to make

    Truth your addiction

    Is this illegal, will they send me to penitentiary

    No, but I might get assassinated

    Like so many others before me.

    The truth seekers

    The reality checkers

    The 100% proof of truth makers

    I represent them all

    That’s why I’m giving you this

    Spiritual, sentimental presentation of my Reputation of intoxication

    So I could give caseloads to my Black Nation

    [email protected]






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  2. $$RICH$$

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    let me say this was grade A.......poeticly
    i wouldn't change a thing here nice poem
     
  3. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW!!!!! I absolutely LOVE this poem....it just flowed so well...i am glad that i did decide to read it....man, this is real nice. There are no words to describe the way i feel about this...but i do have one thing to say...."Now this is what i call POETRY, and u are def. reppin your skillz"
     
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