havnent posted in here in long time...hope u enjoy
Who was i to critizie the path outlined
by the icy tears i cried for
in my heart
jesus died
rosary beads and
holy water baptized
the soul of a lamb and
body of a lion
see i was not who they saw for
skin so often covered
my...
this was a really good piece..
very real..its the kinda thing that alot of people think about but dont write about......i love the subject myself and write about it all the time..in order to find oneself u have to look for yourself....
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this was a good piece right here
i like the repetition at the end..i wonder would it would sound like if u did a piece like that the whole way threw....
nice job
UPin
very stong and consestent from top to bottom..cant say that i agree with you on every thing u talked about but i really liked the piece
would make for a nice spoken word...
nice job
this wasnt bad...seems very emotional and is structured very well..however i think that u should go over it again and cut out some of the rough edges and add a bit more...made for a good read though
nice job
this was clever rich...when i saw the title i was siggin the song...lol
can feel this piece on so manmy levels
nice to see some of your work...its been a while since i'be been around
this was mad creative...really liked how u approaced this
wasnt expecting the end though
And realized
The fusion of she and I
Would never be
So…I walked away
Feeling incomplete
Without reason
Coz I knew going in
She wasn’t the one for me.
Still…
She made her mark...
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