Nevar, Rich, I am grateful for your responses to this poem. It was somewhat difficult to write because it is a break from my normal happy, leave you with a good feeling style of poetry.
But I grew tired of my old style and have spent the past year expanding my horizons in order...
Thanks for reading and responding to my little poem. It's been a while since I was here but it's always good to return and share in the joy of poetry with everyone here. I am truely grateful for your responses, and shall try to live up to your praise.
It is always a pleasure to return here and read your poetic expressions brotha. Love the flow and feel of this one it breathes an air of playfulness and romance.
As always, keep the words moving.
I see. I apologize if I have read you wrong, but I was responding to your poem and the context that it was written in. First, it is presented in first person so naturally I assume that the "I" in the poem was a reference to you. From my experience anytime "I" is used in a poem...
An insistent voice reached her
but she had swallowed her tongue
and it was stuck
down deep in her throat
red lipstick smeared across her lips
told private tales of a past
she buried deep within her soul
and carried branded upon her
silky bronze skin
covered in the latest ann klein
the dream hidden behind my eyes
when all other dreams blended into nightmares
and filled my vision with vacant stares
and my lips uttered silent prayers
and my heart wished upon stars
burning beyond the touch of my fingertips
within Alaskan night skies
Outside my window
This was/is simply Superb!!! Love the way it moved and flowed and presented visions subtle and sublime mingled throughout with the constant presence of nature whispering softly upon the wings of your wording and flowing gently between the lines. It's been a while since I...
An incredible pice of poetry you have crafted here. Loved the metre and the rhyme and the way it just flowed constant and sure as waves along the seashore. Extremely well written!
I have been moved beyond words with this spiritual expression so profound I'm dizzy with random thoughts of praise and encouragement...which is why I now find myself rambling or is it typing randomly in an act to catch each thought and feeling that this poem drew from my soul...