Black Poetry : Notes From The Back Of The Bus.

skuderjaymes

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Notes From The Back Of The Bus.
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Sleepy-eyed
Dazed and bemused
Confused about the difference
Between what you are and what you do.

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Undeveloped mind
atop over-developed body
mouth agape, vacant eyes
giving birth to our future.

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Big ole as*
wind blown hair
got his mind in a whirl
ain't nothing nothing like this white black girl.

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Young Bodies
Strong Minds
Bounding above
the grey to
clearer skies.

--​
 
Master Poet Skuderjaymes,

What a remarkable display of minimalism. The tone is exquisite and played nicely inside my ear. The imagery fleshed out each subject perfectly. I could see them. Touch them. Smell them. I tasted the main subject's feelings of utter despair, disbelief, and disdain.


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Young Bodies
Strong Minds
Bounding above
the grey to
clearer skies.

--​

Yes, our station determines how we travel. Sometimes. But, I am mindful that the young brother (main subject) isn't in that plane he's peering at out the bus window. He's taking "Notes From The Back Of The Bus." I'm left feeling hopeful.

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I look forward to reading more of your work, so that I can admire and learn.

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hey this was good post but i just didn't understand it but it flowed nice this brought back memories so i wrote a piece

being black is a must plus i'm on the back of the bus suspension squeak so soft trying to sleep off a headache in the seats many misled fakes about classrooms, made an A in school so I'm way cool with the teachers my grade persuade them,have a fake notion to make a commotion but no concerns today got me sick about to turn clay into bricks, my religion is so so that make my decisions loco and Austin in my home but Boston is where I roam
 

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