The verse is well wrapped, but I'm wondering - correct me if I'm wrong - I'm wondering how the first part which seems to end at Black, and the second part 'Third through Attack' are related? Note I'm not saying they're not, I'm just wondering how. The second part seems as if it is the makings of a different poem. Also, the reference to 'third man' leads me to ask who are 1st and 2nd. Enlighten me please.
It is critical that we only scratch the surface of my poetry. I must not be discovered as a fraud. You understand?