Black Poetry Critiques : "Souls To Be Saved"

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    Tua-U (Thank you)

    Peace,

    Thank you for the criticisms, all of which I consider positive.

    This is actually a spoken word piece which I've been struggling to format into a written form, which is why some of the technical aspcects such as the spacing of connective words between stanzas has a weird effect. I'm glad somebody caught that.

    As far as the Free Crack Giveaway, that was actually an allusion to a real scene from the Dave Chappelle show, as is the character Tyrone who made reference to it (it was how his friends at the intervention had drawn him there). The point was to emphasize that millions of drunk whiteboys are laughing at the parasitic nature of urban crack addiction.

    Aight, well thanks and I'll be sure to drop more pieces as time passes!

    Hetepu Seb Aungkh

    Peace Health Life

    Qenu Men Uas

    P.S. "Kamitic" is the pronunciation as revealed by the ancestors of Ra Un Nefer Amen the 1st, founder of Ausar Auset Society.