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Black Poetry : Black Man(my naked truth)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by cocobutterskyn, Feb 2, 2010.

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  1. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I

    am

    woman

    Strong

    due
    to circumstances.
    vigorously
    I
    awake
    each day
    taking life on
    with courage
    knowing some will try to
    discourage
    me
    periodically
    I
    grow
    weary
    despite others
    theory
    I

    am

    woman

    strong

    due to
    circumstances

    I’m
    draped
    with a smile so
    bright at times
    no one
    observes it
    covers my frown

    thunderously
    I
    laugh
    to muffle the
    echoing cry of my sometimes
    Hollow
    spirit

    won't you
    (black man)
    try to understand
    why I am the way that I am…

    I
    don't
    believe
    I’m superior
    though society tries to give
    you that impression
    maybe
    my strength
    camouflage my desire to be
    received and loved
    by you
    (black man).
    with
    faith I believe
    one day you will fondly caress my cheek
    to remove my war paint (tough skin) applied to survive
    this world's obstacles placed
    before
    us

    FINALLY…

    then
    you'll see
    my naked truth…

    I NEED YOU!


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:



    ©2002​
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    cherryblossom Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I particularly loved how you used the connecting adverbs. For me, they can be applied to the preceding lines and those after them. The whole piece was powerfully poignant; but your creativeness within was so vividly applied.

    Very well done and well said!
    :terrific:


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    MsInterpret Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love it!!!!! I agree with Cherryblossom...Loved how you used the adverbs...Thanks for the great poem!!

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    $$RICH$$ Administrator STAFF

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    da depth of your pen is awesome
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was simply beautiful....
    and something that should be shouted by the town cryer.....
    daily....

    one love
    khasm
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Peace coco:
    This is awesomely lovely.
    It made me think of Terisa Griffin's
    "Naked Soul"


    Much Luv & Peace,


    ~4EVER
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yep... that did it for me

    I love it and I feel inspired by it

    You're such a godsend my sister :)

    truly MUCH MAD CRAZY props on this one sister poetess indeed :)
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a message well received

    ALLOW ME to wipe that war paint off...store that bow-and-arrows...and massage your feet. your journey has been long. now, black men are here to carry you forward, my queen.

    the river floweth.
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  9. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks so much...

    I truly appreciate everyone's time taken to read and respond!

    The Black man and woman are an incredible force together.
    We need to understand each other better to get back to black power!


    Thanks again, BIGTIME!:)


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:dance:
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    you have my undivided blak man attention... love it.