you told me that you loved me
and put no 1 above me
you told me that you need me
and no 1 else could be me
you told me that you wanna keep me
and no 1 else could see me
you told me all these lies 4 all these years
and now im saying goodbye fa real
you told me how i was the best
and i was you down chick nothin less
you told me the other broads coudn't compare
and i was the one with that special flare
you told me that you loved me
and put no 1 above me
you told me that you need me
and no 1 else could be me
you told me you wanna keep me
and no ther girls could even see me
so i guess you lied about sayin you'd never leave me
but i just cant believe i put up wit the ish you told me
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Platty P...if I TOLD YOU that I was really feelin this scribe, would u believe me...Well its the truth...This is a nice piece..thanx for sharing...


Peace!

lol thank u drizzo lol

WOW Plat... Flow on sis...

THANK YOU SONNEEEEEEEEEEEEEE:kiss: :hearts2: :thanks:

this run like whoaaaaaaaa awesome piece
you could have broken it into a few stanza like this

You told me that you loved me
and put no 1 above me
you told me that you need me
and no 1 else could be me
you told me that you wanna keep me
and no 1 else could see me.

You told me all these lies 4 all these years
and now i'm saying goodbye fa real
you told me how i was the best
and i was your down chick nothin less
you told me the other broads couldn't compare
and i was the one with that special flare.

You told me that you love me
and put no 1 above me
you told me that you need me
and no 1 else could be me
you told me you wanna keep me
and no other girls could see me.

So i guess you lied about saying you'd never leave me
but i just can't believe , i put up wit the ish you told me.

the you'd could be better expressed with you'll or you're

but this piece was all that and some i really enjoyed this made me wanna just flow
all up in it wow !

thanx rich!!!!!! yeah thats smthin i need to start doin i dont do tha stanzaz which i should

it bring out the flava and speak deeper to the reader most of the time
but often it hit the core str8 the way you have it ...i love this flow
i still want to dance in it.

LOL THANX BUT GO A HEAD DO UR THING LOL GET DOWN DROP IT LIKE ITS HOT LOL

revisit of a great written piece and classic from da phatty1 files

I definately enjoyed this too. The message is clear. And you grabbed me when you started out by saying, you told me.

Like you told me and this is why I feel the way I feel. Like it makes since. Stanzas are cool too, like Rich said.

i feel this for realz. I feel weird critiquing other peoples work because i'm still learning the art of writing, however there is a flow to your writing that I like reading and its good to see ya post. I haven't seen ya posts for a while. So its good to read.

Lovely

Desert Storm

I appreciate you!
Thank You for adding you finess :)
I appreciate the comments
and You are an OUTSTANDING POET POETESS!!!
SO I accept ANYTHING you can input:vball:
I still need to work on my stanza'z :D
LOL
Peace and LOVE!!!
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