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choclatefantasy
08-23-2005, 04:26 PM
How come when I see you
I feel so blue
How come after all this time
I can't get over you

How come when I look at you
You look with such disgust
How come when you look at me
My eyes feel w/ lust

How come when I think of you
I want to break down and cry
How come when you ignore me
I want to die

How come when you're with another girl
I immediately don't like her
How come every memory of you
Is not a blur

How come I always care what you think
W/ everything I do
How come every vision I have
I want it o be w/ you

How come the way I feel
You don't feel the same
How come the way you feel for me
I feel I am to blame

$$RICH$$
08-23-2005, 04:59 PM
this was laid out to perfection
nice break and stanza's

Poetrymama
08-28-2005, 06:19 AM
Very Nice poem of feelings in need of evalution.
:karate: to the curb.

$$RICH$$
09-05-2005, 05:03 AM
just beautiful and a perfect piece
need no work just published

queentswana
09-12-2005, 11:51 PM
How come...
you feel that, it's him that deserves your chocolate?
How come...
you feel like, he is worthy of your love?
How come...
he don't see, that it's his lost?
nice piece poet and welcome to the family

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