The Gift

All the gifts that I got so far

There`s only one gift that I want from God

It is the only gift that He can give

The only thing is that I have to give up one rib

God made this gift so well

The gift I`m talking about is a female

The gift is so wonderful, her eyes unique

Her breast, her feet

Those pretty brown eyes looking at me

Is this how my gift supposed to be

She look like an cute innocent bunny

I can`t wait to come over to her and taste her like honey

I want to caress her body suck on her breast

After that I want to....well you know the rest

She is a great to all the males

This is the end of my poem so I bid you fairwell

yeah Jam, we do know the rest :lol: do enjoy your rib
thanks for sharing this

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this was very nice and surely the rest is known
the Gift is one's great treasure.....nice work

Very nice poem. I don't eat Pork or ribs but You ENJOY.

Tight poem!

:cool: another yardie in the midst ....blesss


The poem had a nice vibe to it...loved the first couple lines the most

keep the flow goin
and welcome to destee...

word from Mz.Soull aka prizefighter :cool:

what's up s-jam...
this poem was cute...and if that was your desired impression i would say that you have accomplished your goal...i don't know if you want your female to be good to ALL the males though ;)...i challenge you to drop a poem of more depth and substance next time around...cute can only get you so far now days...

one love
khasm

Another Yaadie...hail up.

I agree with Khasm13. Although I am just testing the waters myself, I found myself wanting to turn the page on your piece. Good work, but more depth would have had me hooked fo real. Keep on keeping on star!!! Nuff Luv.