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onewithman
08-20-2005, 04:51 PM
A spirit set free

Like a woman made to climb heights of passion
From love only her soul mate could know
His right touch needed as she surrenders
Her will in a rhythm of back and forth to and fro....

With every beat of her pulse pleasure rises
Tantamount to a powerful tsunami
Waves of ecstasy and bliss a thrilling motion
Climaxing in a blushful glow a man sent
From the heavens God only knows....

How this man takes me to a place
Where my body feels safe and serene
I am melting into him wills are as one
Weightlessness due to astro-traveling....

I am, I will always be, I am freed
From the bounds of infinite limitations
Produced by finite obligations

I see, I hear, I taste, I smell, I feel all for the first time
There is no gender in this world I claimed mine
Which I have been brought to named all in all
Fortunate to be blessed by divinity's call....

Love and hate opposites that are one and the same
No longer polarized energies powered by extremes
Yet balanced flying on smooth polished wings

Wait, what is this, no it can’t be
Yes it is happening true indeed
My wing has been clipped
I’m soaring downward rapidly
Is this the rapture in reverse or
Could it be I am cursed?

Why, or why, am I spiraling?
Where is this man that was heaven sent?
Faster and faster I am approaching soon
But what, why, when, where and from whom
Are all questions encompassing my thoughts

Here goes the answer to quench my soul
All that I experienced was a sample to come
A dream state pure as gold....

A utopia coded in my mind burnt in my heart
Wills will be one once more
Soon as I go through destiny’s door

I have something to do before I meet with my dream
All that I have and all that is in my power
Is to serve God in this final hour

The next level has begun watch out now
I am well on my way my wing is being repaired
By self-mastery and spiritual awareness sake

I am, I see, I hear, I taste, I smell, I feel,
I always was, I will forever be....

A spirit set free

$$RICH$$
08-20-2005, 06:26 PM
welcome to destee.com critique & workshop of honesty
welcome to the house of respect and peace within

This was grade A great concept well written and versed
smooth stanza's well done poet welcome !

onewithman
08-21-2005, 04:14 PM
Peace,

Thank you for your thoughts shared and it is always a pleasure to have others enjoy my writings.

$$RICH$$
08-22-2005, 05:42 AM
most welcome do continue ..................

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