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moham
05-13-2005, 05:39 PM
He told me she broke his heart.
His only family in this hostile foreign country.
No family, no friends, no permit, no job, but he… he didn’t care because he had her.
She, was all he needed. Is what all he needs.

She was not afraid to be alone anymore. She had to go her own way.
This relationship only was no longer enough for her stay.
Since the age of fifteen she had been taking care of two, it was time now to take care
of her own and do the things she wanted to do.

It has been enough, she sadly told me.
He could only smile whenever I was around.

moham
05-13-2005, 05:40 PM
...and another one

:heart:

$$RICH$$
05-13-2005, 07:20 PM
this was nice and could be the art of a great short story !

Poetrymama
05-13-2005, 11:05 PM
Very nice write.

1poetsought
05-15-2005, 01:58 AM
In the mix... betwixt ~ reconciliation.

Do your thing poet!


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