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moham
05-12-2005, 10:53 PM
Life turned softer with days, slowly brighter
My heart, more than a little lighter. I gave you a tear,
and received a sincere smile.

Unfortunately indeed, it has been a while
…... this image.

A man, taking genuine interest,
occasionally pleasantly surprised
this man convincing me, that love is near,
reassuring me not to fear

to let go of the fear.

Promise, I won’t hurt you. He said
to follow my heart and read the directions
My destiny would unfold itself..

To let go of fear,
since its paranoia and numbness were to consume me,
entirely.

We laughed heartily.

moham
05-12-2005, 11:02 PM
I haven't been able to finish many of my scribbles, lately.
Half-way, I seemed to bump on this dreamers, believers and writers block. :)
So please do
...help a sister out!

:o moham

$$RICH$$
05-13-2005, 02:43 AM
what you have scribe has made an impact
this was nicely done and expressed
just keep writing it will all come together just don't stop !

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