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Khasm13
03-11-2005, 09:23 PM
da ghettooooooooooooooooooooooo...

the land where smoke blows and catz got short bank rolls....
nickle and dyme'n with no ooooooooooooooooooooo's
some good and bad folks afros and cornrolls.....
if you can't crack scold's...watch out for da lock and load...
the streets can make the inhabitants old....
..........()
before their time...intoxicating demons grabbing hold...
while enticing addictives block out life's blinding shine...
women and men mentalties always on 'on how ima gonna mine'
cause the temperature is rising and my @ss is on the line....
..........()
as i stood in line...3 neo-nazi's called me filthy and a baboon...lost in time
because my gym shoes were dirty from flying like a birdie on da daily dusty grind
stupid b@stards...ya'll won't walk in da hood without pissin in ya pants...wetting your behind
some po folks gotta resort to a life of crime...just to dine
i'm....the product segregated systems and ghetto...of...the...mind...
..........()
my feet walk with a sway because my ancestors feet were shackled back in da day
from golden sands now i use my hands to fight roaches where i lay
you can call me filthy cause in reality im a scapegoat...like timothy mcvey
so bacdafucup...while i get this 40 and a blunt to go with this blazin flame hay....

say....

haven't you been told?
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my teeth shine with gold...
..........()
from the land i was sold...
..........()
cause...im...from...

da ghetto

Young Poet
03-12-2005, 01:46 AM
god **** boy.. This poem goes hard.

flo-real
03-14-2005, 07:17 PM
Hey sweetheart,

good job I love your style it's mad dope so keep it up and don't alter it for no one.

Now this is a challenge for you!! I want you to write Dookie Tooth Pt 2 and see if you can nail it! and it has to be better than part 1

holla at me

Flo-Real

SEPIATEA
03-14-2005, 10:35 PM
nice vibe... luv your play on words

Khasm13
03-15-2005, 08:43 AM
thanks fam for the love...i was stuck in da crib with my nephew friday night so i decided to write...good lookin...ya'll can get a lil mo harsh though...i know it's not perfect.......:)




Hey sweetheart,

good job I love your style it's mad dope so keep it up and don't alter it for no one.

Now this is a challenge for you!! I want you to write Dookie Tooth Pt 2 and see if you can nail it! and it has to be better than part 1

holla at me

Flo-Real

oh yeah?...that aint nuthin but a word...be back later

one love
khasm

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