yes you are fine as wine
and stay decked out all the time
from the top of your head to the sole of your feet
but there is a problem baby....
there is something in your teeth
that I can smell through your cheeks
and that bothers me
I can't figure it out, but it's worse than a cavity
wait.....I got it! it's something embedded in the roots.....
It's a Dookie Tooth!

The thing I don't understand is how all of your so-called friends
titled you the man
but behind your back saying
Tyrone walk around thinkin he da truth!
but...did you smell dat *****'s Dookie Tooth?

So what you walk in da spot
panties get hot...mouth's drop
shows stop,
but when you talk...smells like you been suckin on dookie pops

Now don't get wrong
I'm not talkin bout breath from the early morn
or breath from smoking cigs or weed all day long,
cause once you pop an altoid that smell is gone,

But the kind you gotta stop and ask did you poot? ... and then suddenly remember naaww..that's the Dookie Tooth

And why do all of your sentences have to start with the letter "H" "Hey" "How are you" "How was your day" and I wanna say I'd be fine if you stop breathing my way!

Tellin folks "I don't know why she hatin
cause if I give her some I got her"
you may get me but you won't keep me
cause yo breath! smells like hot dog water.

Now I'm just tryna help a brutha out!
but truthfully
you need to get a colon cleanser for your mouth!

poluttin da air like smog do!
what you ask!.......the dookie tooth!

Actin like you aint never heard of a bottle of scope
what you need to do is run down to 7/11 and get a listerine big gulp

See out kast was wrong for not tellin you that their song was really dedicated to you...
cause yo breath smells like (singing) Boo Boowooohh!!

So ladies if you get nausious cause he came behind your ear and whispered "Hey Boo call 911 cause you been attacked by the dookie tooth!

dang...he might just have a severe case of halitosis....lol
i've seen this poem somewhere before...u must have been on the net for awhile...this was funny as hell...i knew some women like this...
ok...let's get into it...the one liners really did it for me on this joint...some of the rhymes could have been a lil better but for the funnyness factor...it outshined that by far and the different examples you gave flowed well...i would not change a thing with this piece...not at all...good job poet...

one love
khasm

this poem express reality of people
and it took me in with the funny bone
i like'd it a lot and see no change required
nice flowing piece

I am at work, LMAO!!! This piece is too funny to change anything about it. I agree with Khasm that the rhymes were a little shaky a time or two, but who cares?? This poem was off da chain. Are you a comedian too?? Just wondering. :welldone:

Nice drop it has alot of pop.
Now I hope some brothers will pop in some tic tacks or gum lol. :zipit:

Flo-Real, you remind me of my sister whose name is Flo also, that ish was hella funny, that sucka been eatin dookie-on-a-stick for lunch, then washed it down with a tall glass of ca-ca cola, dizaaaam. LMBAO RO(MF)F. Flow on poet.......

Represent tha mighty might Sacra-mental cali-4-sho-nia.....LOL

:cool:

LMAO...yeppers....I know some fine dressed sistas with this same problem...I just fell out my chair laughin at this one...
great drop...and very timely....
especially funny when you talked bout him using any word beginning with "H"...oh my God that was funny.