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flo-real
03-09-2005, 11:35 AM
(2xs)
you say ya black till the cops come gunnin
you switch suits then ya take of runnin
so busy frontin tryna be just like me
you need to be who ya s'posed to be
(second time say when you don't even know my history)

aint it funny how when ya back's against the wall, these so-called friends don't want to take that fall and then
all of a sudden they act like they don't even know you at all oh! and them being mixed with black there could be no possiblity of that
in the interregation room talkin bout "oh ray ray got all the blocks sowed up with sellers of crack" ask me anything I'll tell you everything as long as it saves me, from penetentury, cause see I got a family.
last week you was hollerin my homie fo life
I got yo back dogg! even when ya throat's under the knife
cause we tightt!!!
aayy hey I'll even leave my wife.
but you snitchin just almost got me jail for life

(1xs)
you say ya black till the cops come gunnin
you switch suits then ya take of runnin
unless you know about me or my history
you need to be who ya s'posed to be

tell me what you really know about this struggle...of the black man
on how our ancestors were raped of their riches and land
not to mention the many counts of raped women
were you black then?

Were you black when marcus Garvey devolped a Pan- Negro liberation
or in may of 1943, with the airmen by way of tuskegee
were the first blacks into military aviation
or what about when Mary Bethune taught us to openly protest discrimination
or when Martin Luther King was trying to invoke peace upon this wicked nation
were you black then?

or were you only black when you heard Kobe had made the pro's
or when you seen Labron James with that hummer on 24's
or was it when 50 cent was on ya radio
or when you sung along to can a sista flow, flow, tell me can a sista flow!
that must be when you jumped on the bandwagon
because you couldn't have been black back then with these actions!
see our culture has been taught to unite as one and to never give up your brutha for no one under the gun!
So if you gone be black then be that
but understand and know the struggle, don't be so quick to jump at the first sign of trouble.

you say ya black till the cops come gunnin
you switch suits then ya take of runnin
so busy frontin tryna be just like me
you need to be who ya s'posed to be
(you need to learn about my history)

1poetsought
03-19-2005, 06:31 PM
Love the title because really, it says it all. This one couldn't fail if you reworked it until the cows come home.

tichaona
03-21-2005, 09:18 AM
i don't see anything "wrong" with the theme of this piece. it works for me. i would just suggest that you rework the line breaks so they flow a lil more smoothly. excellent job of portraying those whose blackness is only skin deep...

$$RICH$$
03-24-2005, 03:04 AM
i truely agree it was a well done piece
but try and break the lines at a point
so the next connect smoothly but
over all it's a great piece

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