We did what we did,
and I hold no regrets,
It was an exchange of love,
where our hearts finally met,
Well, that's what I believed.
You told me that you love me,
And you'll stay by my side,
You whispered words with sincerity,
As you plunged deep inside,
And now our seed is growing,
And I don't know what to do,
I told you I'm with child,
and you said it's not for you.
At first I was confused,
At shock at what you said,
You uttered words of betrayel,
that left my heart dead.
I tried my hardest not to cry
Cause I see now,
your not worth my tears,
But in my heart I was sobbing,
As the word echoed through my ears.
I yelled " I thought we was meant to be,
and our love is really true".
He replied " the devil comes to man
In the shape of a woman
But i didn't think it'd be you".

Ebony, I like the conciseness inherent in your thought, however, feel that you could express more emotion, thus, making an even stronger case of betrayal. You want the reader to identify rather than sympathize... Yeah, you got what it takes.

awesome piece ebony...these are the lines that caught me

At shock at what you said,
You uttered words of betrayel,
that left my heart dead.
I tried my hardest not to cry
Cause I see now,
your not worth my tears,
But in my heart I was sobbing,
As the word echoed through my ears

this sincere piece caught me off guard...it's a shame that some catz can't step up and face their responcibilities...heartfelt piece...it's joint's like this...joints from the heart...that are impossible to make changes too...you can't tell someone how they are feeling...

one love
khasm

Very heartfelt piece and i enjoyed this read...I cant say change anything for it was poured from the heart and I can only image the hurt in this piece

Angel

the message this send to minds who bare child
and the betrayal of hearts was well written every line
cascaded with the next awesome write very talented

:wave: :thanks: Thank you all!!

Betrayal hurts
no matter how delivered
Nice piece